Gen-ART LC Review of draft-ietf-tsvwg-ecn-tunnel-08

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Document: draft-ietf-tsvwg-ecn-tunnel-08
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2010-07-01
IETF LC End Date: 2010-07-06
IESG Telechat date: (if known)

Summary:

This draft is almost ready for publication as a proposed standard. I have a couple of procedural questions
that should be considered first, as well as a few editorial comments.

Major Issues: None.

Minor Issues:

-- RFC Editor request (immediately after ToC): "In the RFC index, RFC3168 should be identified as an update
to RFC2003. 
RFC4301 should be identified as an update to RFC3168."

This seems odd. I assume the intent is that this draft says that things from 3168 should be applied to 2003,
therefore updating 2003, etc? If so, wouldn't it be more correct to say that _this_ draft updates 2003 and
3168? 

Gen-art review of draft-ietf-avt-seed-srtp-14

I missed the announcement of the telechat due to being locked away in an 
EU review..

Just a note to say that the comments that I made on last call of -09 had 
been addressed.

However the web ref [SEED-EVAL] that I took some care to be altered to 
en esxisting English language document is now once again reporting a 404 
error.

Regards,
Elwyn

review of draft-ietf-opsawg-mpls-tp-oam-def-06.txt

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Document: draft-ietf-opsawg-mpls-tp-oam-def-06.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 2010-07-01
IETF LC End Date: 2010-07-09
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - 1 page 5: references by name are better the references by number
  (by experience or for the 2.1 MEF reference)

 - 2.1 page 6, 3 page 8 (first): i.e. -> i.e.,

 - 2.1 page 6: missing word (or change for a by name reference style) in:
 more effectively MEF 17 [9].

 - 3 page 8 (second): i.e. -> , i.e.,

Re: Review of draft-moriarty-post-inch-rid-11

Thanks, I've cleared.

On 7/6/10 11:06 AM, moriarty_kathleen <at> emc.com wrote:
> Hello,
> 
> I posted a new version that should resolve all outstanding comments.
> Please let me know if any further changes are suggested/required.
> 
> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-moriarty-post-inch-rid/
> 
> Thank you,
> Kathleen
> 
> 
> Kathleen M. Moriarty, CISSP | Information Security Services|
> 617-851-5807 | Moriarty_Kathleen <at> emc.com  | EMC 
> 

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Re: Review of draft-moriarty-post-inch-rid-11

I did too.

spt

Peter Saint-Andre wrote:
> Thanks, I've cleared.
> 
> On 7/6/10 11:06 AM, moriarty_kathleen <at> emc.com wrote:
>> Hello,
>>
>> I posted a new version that should resolve all outstanding comments.
>> Please let me know if any further changes are suggested/required.
>>
>> https://datatracker.ietf.org/doc/draft-moriarty-post-inch-rid/
>>
>> Thank you,
>> Kathleen
>>
>>
>> Kathleen M. Moriarty, CISSP | Information Security Services|
>> 617-851-5807 | Moriarty_Kathleen <at> emc.com  | EMC 
>>
> 

[GenArt] Review of draft-ietf-stone-mgcp-vbd-07

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Document: draft-stone-mgcp-vbd-07
Reviewer: Wassim Haddad
Review Date: 2010-07-08
IETF LC End Date: 2010-07-09
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: This draft is ready to be published as informational RFC.

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:

- Section 8: 

suggestion: "In this section, we provide two call flows examples".

- Page 37: step 7:

s/turns/turn (and add ",")

Regards,

Re: Gen-ART Last Call Review of draft-ietf-behave-v6v4-xlate-stateful-11

Hi Peter,

Thanks for the review.

all comments have been addressed, see log below.

El 16/06/10 0:09, McCann Peter-A001034 escribió:
> I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
> Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
> <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.
>
> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
> you may receive.
>
> Document: draft-ietf-behave-v6v4-xlate-stateful-11
> Reviewer: Pete McCann
> Review Date: 2010-06-15
> IETF LC End Date: 2010-06-15
> IESG Telechat date: unknown
>
> Summary: Some bugs need fixing before publication
>
> Major issues: none
>
> Minor issues:
>
> Section 1.2.1:
>     The IPv4 address pool is a set of IPv4 addresses, normally a small
>     prefix assigned by the local administrator.
> The pool is small but the prefix is long.  Should say "long prefix

Gen-ART LC Review of draft-ietf-netmod-yang-usage-07

Document: draft-ietf-netmod-yang-usage-07
Reviewer: Enrico Marocco
Review Date: July 9, 2010
IETF LC End Date: July 8, 2010

Note: This review comes one day after the LC End Date, my bad. I'm
sending it anyways, hoping it may be useful in the reminder of the
publishing process. Feel free to ignore my late comments.

Summary: This draft is on the right track but has open issues, described
in the review.

Major Issues:

None.

Minor Issues:

Some guidelines in the document point to documents on the web that
cannot be assumed to stay stable for as long as the RFC. My advice is to
replace them with more stable references, or with new text in the
document itself. In particular:

S. 3. "General Documentation Guidelines:" replace the URL pointing to
rfc-editor.org with references to RFC 2223. The first paragraph could be
rewritten as:

OLD:
    YANG data model modules under review are likely to be contained in
    Internet-Drafts.  All guidelines for Internet-Draft authors MUST be

A *new* batch of IETF LC reviews - 8 July 2010

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Assignments for July 15, 2010 Telechat

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