Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-roll-applicability-home-building-08
Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour <at> ericsson.com>
2015-03-22 20:28:51 GMT
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Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2015-03-21
IETF LC End Date: 2015-03-23
IESG Telechat date: NA
This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments.
-[Page 1], "RPL" first used in title/abstract, Would be good to spell it out.
-[Page 5], Section 2, "Monitoring of functional correctness is at least as important.". As important as
what? (not clear)
-[Page 5], Section 2, "Devices typically communicate their status regularly and send alarm messages
notifying a malfunction of equipment or network."
Not clear what equipment is? network node is an equipment?
-[Page 6], Section 2.1, "for large installation"--->"for a large installation"
-[Page 8], Section 2.2.2, "fire detectors and the smoke dampers need to be put in place to meet the stringent
Where can we find a value for the delay requirement of fire detectors? A value or reference would be good.
-[Page 9], Section 2.2.4,"advanced scene and group control". Not clear what "scene" means.