Just pasted answers to the draft-03 review:
http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/bmwg/current/msg02413.html
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OK, I'm happy with that. Please clarify this in section 4.3.3,
eg:
Various Flow monitoring
implementations might use different
default values regarding the
export of Control Information
[RFC5470]. Note that Control
Information includes IPFIX Options and Templates [RFC5101].
The Flow Export corresponding to
Control Information ...
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Clarified - see the text please
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Note that Control Information includes IPFIX Options and
Templates [RFC5101].
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Yes, I know that - what is your point here please ??
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Per Brian's feedback, please add to section 4.5:
Packet sampling and flow sampling is out of
scope of this document.
This document applies to situations without
packet or flow sampling.
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Added
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Section 1: remove "the":
is provided in the section 3.3.
(And many more times, throughout the document - eg, at the end
of Section 3.1, in Section 3.4.1, at the very end of 3.4.2,
... Please search yourself.)
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Searched and removed or occurences.
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In section 1, at the bottom of page 2, write "DUT's"
and remove "support":
The only restriction may be the DUT's lack
of support for Flow monitoring support of the
particular traffic
type.
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Changed
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Section 2.2.5:
mention that there SHOULD NOT be any
export filtering, so that all the expired cache entries are exported. If there
is export filtering and it can't be disabled, this needs to be noted.
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Added as suggested
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Also in section 3.1, I had said:
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I answered this in the previous review already:
http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/bmwg/current/msg02413.html
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Section 3.4.1:
In this scenario every packet seen by the DUT
creates a
new Cache entry and forces the DUT to the full
Cache processing fill the Cache
instead of just updating packet and byte counters
on of an already
existing Cache entry.
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Changed
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Section 3.4.2: the indentation of the second line in each point
is wrong - compare with other a/b/c immediately above and below:
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Changed
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Section 4.1:
s/if/whether/
The ideal way to implement the measurement is by
using a single
device to provide the sender and receiver
capabilities with a sending
port and a receiving port. This allows for an easy
check if whether all the
traffic sent by the sender was re-transmitted by
the DUT and received
at the receiver.
PJ: If the sender and receiver are independent (ie, two
devices), then there needs to be another link directly from the sender to the
receiver (ie, not through the DUT), so the receiver can make that comparison.
- how can the comparison be made if the tester is unable to
implement your suggestion of a single device?
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Changed. In our tests we don't have one device but we still know
what was sent by configuration of the sender and receiver. It is
not ideal as stated in the draft but still not very difficult to
figure out. I don't see any importance/relevance of this - it is
a standard function of any commercial traffic generator.
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Section 4.1:
In all measurements, the export
interface MUST have enough bandwidth to
transmit Flow Export data
without congestion. In other words, the
export interface MUST NOT be
a bottleneck during the measurement.
PJ: What if the receiving interface, or the collector itself, is
a bottleneck? Previously you said it doesn't matter, and I disagreed.
- data could be lost at the receiving end, making the DUT look
worse than it really is.
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I answered this in the previous review already:
http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/bmwg/current/msg02413.html
I believe this is all covered in the section 4.4 already
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Section 4.2:
The DUT export interface (see Figure 2) MUST
be configured with
sufficient output buffers to avoid dropping
the Flow Export data due
to a simple lack of resources in the
interface hardware.
PJ: then it might not be configured as it would in real life
conditions. Wouldn't it be better to record the real-life results than to tweak
the settings just for testing purposes?
- eg, consider if the DUT operates with insufficient buffers in
the real-world scenario, and therefore drops a lot more data than when testing
under "ideal" conditions in the lab.
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I would like to disagree here. We are not measuring real life
scenario here. We are trying to measure the maximum what the
DUT can do. In real life you would also configure the export
interface
(if there is one dedicated at all - see the discussion in
Appendix
B) not to drop the export packets.
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Section 4.3:
The DUT SHOULD support IPFIX [RFC5101]
Say why?
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This has been changed several times as the result of the
previous reviews. I don't
know what text you would like there. Please suggest something.
The previous text was "The DUT SHOULD support IPFIX
[RFC5101] to allow easier
results comparison"
and your/someone else's question was "What difference it
would make ??" - sorry no idea
what you want from me here, it just feels like common sense to
have same protocol
for testing everywhere if possible ??
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Section 4.3.1:
In the case when both ingress and
egress Flow monitoring is
enabled on one DUT the results
analysis needs to take into account
that each Flow will be
represented in the DUT Cache by two Flow
Records (one for each direction)
and therefore also the Flow
Export will contain those two
Flow Records.
PJ: you assume a single cache. ingress and egress may
potentially be recorded in separate caches. This may, or may not, impact the
performance.
- so mention that whether the combined ingress and egress
traffic is measured in one cache or each separately in its own cache, may
impact performance and should be recorded.
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I have added text in 4.3.2.l If it is not sufficient please
suggest
something more appropriate.
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Section 4.3.2: add "of", remove "the", and
move "instantly" :
The Cache's Inactive and Active
Timeouts MUST be known and taken
into account when designing the
measurement as specified in
section 5. If the Flow monitoring
implementation allows only
timeouts of zero (e.g. immediate
timeout or non-existent Cache) then
the measurement conditions in the
section 5 are fulfilled
inherently without any additional
configuration. The DUT simply
instantly exports instantly
information about every single packet.
PJ: Assuming that the cache works with timeouts. What if it uses
some other mechanism, eg number of packets in the flow?
- state what impact other such mechanisms may have.
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Changed the text. I don't know about any such impact. Could you
elaborate
please ??
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Section 4.3.3: add "of" :
Section 10 of [RFC5101] and section 8.1 of
[RFC5470] discuss
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Changed.
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Section 4.3.3: add "of" :
Section 10 of [RFC5101] and section 8.1 of
[RFC5470] discuss
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Added
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Section 4.3.3:
The Exporting Process SHOULD be configured
with IPFIX [RFC5101] as
the protocol to use to format the Flow Export
data. If the Flow
monitoring implementation does not support
it, proprietary
protocols MAY be used.
PJ: what difference would this make to the testing?
Eg, NFv5 is a proprietary protocol which has smaller data
records and no templates – so it requires less export bandwidth. Wouldn't
the results look better if NFv5 was used rather than IPFIX?
- at least state that since proprietary protocols may make a
considerable difference to the testing, the exact protocol being tested (and
any related configuration parameters) MUST be recorded and only similar
protocols should be compared.
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This section has been edited many times to satisfy various
reviewers
ideas. I have tried another one. Of it does not suit please
provide
some text. This also answers your comment about 4.3.
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Section 4.3.5, remove "on" :
The test report should therefore
contain information
containing on how many Metering
and Exporting processes were
configured on the DUT for the
selected Observation Points.
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Removed
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Section 4.3.6: insert "The"
The forwarding performance document [RFC5695]
specifies
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Section 4.4:
However if the Collector is also used to decode the
Flow Export data
then it SHOULD support IPFIX [RFC5101] for easier
results analysis.
PJ: Again, why does IPFIX make it easier?
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Please suggest some text, this has gone through many variations
as well.
It is answered in the discussion above.
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Section 4.9.1:
A packet with destination IP address equal to A is
sent every 10
seconds, so the Cache entry would be refreshed in
the Cache every 10
seconds. However, the Inactive Timeout is 5
seconds, so the Cache
entries will expire from the Cache due to the
Inactive Timeout and
when a new packet is sent with the same IP address
A it will create a
new entry in the Cache.
PJ: theoretically. In practice... the DUT has to check those
10,000 cache entries within the 10 seconds to ensure that expired cache entries
are exported. If it checks 1,000 cache entries per second, it may only just be
ready to expire the existing cache entry when the new packet arrives. Therefore
the new packet may sometimes be added to the existing cache entry, giving
occasional 2 packet flows!
- so note that this behaviour depends upon the design an
efficiency of the cache ager, and incidences of multi-packet flows observed
during this test should be noted.
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Added text as suggested.
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At the end of section 4.9.1:
with large Cache Sizes and high packet rate where
the DUT's actual
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Changed
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Section 4.9.2:
So each stream has a packet rate of 10 packets per
second. The packets
A packet with destination IP address equal to A is
sent every 0.1
second, so it means that the Cache entry is
refreshed in the Cache
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Changed
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I think you could work around all the config issues by simply
saying that the DUT should conform to the IPFIX Config model described in
draft-ietf-ipfix-configuration-model (which is in the RFC Editor's queue,
waiting for the IPFIX MIB).
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Tried to add some text to 5.1, if it is not suitable please
provide
some.
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Section 5.3: the "Page 19" header/footer is broken -
search for [Page 19].
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Couldn't see it broken, but tried
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PJ: show that calculation here.
- show the exact calculation you have in mind, to ensure that
every reader calculates the same.
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The formula is just above the text you point to, so it is
trivial
to figure out:
The measurement time interval is then calculated as the
difference
(stop time) - (start time) - (Inactive Timeout).
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PJ: I'm confused by the final part. What are you trying to
avoid?
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I have answered this in the previous review, Please read
http://www.ietf.org/mail-archive/web/bmwg/current/msg02413.html
to progress any further or simply suggest some text
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Section 7: "The" shouldn't be capitalised:
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Changed
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B.1 add "the" and "a":
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Added
The climate of Edinburgh is such that the weak succumb young
....
and the strong envy them.
Dr.
Johnson
From: Paul Aitken (paitken)
Sent: 09 September 2011 14:01
To: Jan Novak (janovak)
Cc: Al Morton; bmwg <at> ietf.org
Subject: Re: WGLC: draft-ietf-bmwg-ipflow-meth-03
Jan,
I reviewed the changes from -02 to -03, then the changes from -01 to -03, and
finally I reviewed what you've done in -03 in response to my previous feedback.
The new version is a big improvement over -01 which I last reviewed - so I have
many minor comments, along with several points you seem to have missed or
overlooked.
Please see my comments inline below.
I look forward to seeing a -04.
P.